Tuesday, 19 November 2013

Secret Lairs: Online Greenlight Review 2

1 comment:

  1. OGR 20/11/2013

    Hi Rosalyn,

    A big improvement in terms of the ambience of your lair; feels more menacing and dangerous now :) A couple of suggestions I'd make: I'm just wondering at the 'squareness' of everything; in terms of a floor plan, I'm wondering if an ellipsis would be a more organic/feminine shape - with columns creating a more enclosed feeling? Likewise the base on which the 'venom fountain' sits - somehow, seeing it on a such square plinth makes it feel more like an object in a museum. In terms of lighting, I wondering too if a 'spotlight' effect from above highlighting the venom fountain might lend some further drama to your scene? So, really, I'm just suggesting you work from an 'oval-like' or lozenge shape floorplan to get some additional organicism into your arachnoid lair - and a bit more visual interest - and to think about dialling up the staging of your venom fountain for cinematic effect?